Comments : Raped Wood

  • 15 years ago

    by TheRevelation

    Oh, I love the beauty of this poem. Its beautiful bringing forth the issues that not many people are aware of or care about. Lovely! 5/5

  • Well i though it was good.

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This was very interesting. I loved it. Nature poems are hard to come by on this website, because most people don't write them. But this just shows me that someone can write very well about nature. This poem is great. I liked the little touch of the rhyming. It was more of a free-verse and I like that. :] Good job, 5/5 keep it up =)

  • 15 years ago

    by H E Losey

    A very nice read, fine metre and rhyme with a story that can't be told too often.
    Not sure of rhyme in first stanza,
    as always just an opinion.

  • 15 years ago

    by gracey grey

    "Raped wood " how true the title is.Sad what men do to achieve their needs by destroying what we need the most.Nothing can ever replace the grandeur nature holds.Nothing.Hopefully this poem touches people as it did to me.Beautiful write.Keep it up.

  • 15 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    The metaphor of this poem was a risky choice. It was bold and strong and gave a statement about your character. It really payed of you were very unique with it

    'Man is the vandal,
    raping their wood'

    Exellent.

    I tried to find flaws but I really couldnt find any the flow was flawless

    Exellent

    Alex xx

  • 15 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    What a perfect poem with an important message.
    Perfect flow, great imagery. A favorite for me.

  • 15 years ago

    by NicoleBaby101

    Awsome!!!!!!!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by victoria

    This peice is very WELL written. Its flowed very nicely!

    Keep on writting.

  • 15 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    I live in South Africa sad to say,this poem strikes very close to home,people in general are very selfish.In my country people do excactly that, they destroy our indigenous forests which are all protected and the people charged with looking after the forests are often found to be a culprit.It was nice to see just last night on telly they built a road around a 500-600 year old yellow wood tree at a cost of five million rand.Excellent write as usual you don't dissapoint

    Grant

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Michael,

    A trip back in time here and I notice two things have changed in the eight years since: 1) we now seem to concentrate our efforts not just on destroying the trees, but also each other. 2) You no longer write rhyming poetry quite so often! Obviously, the former is more relevant and a good deal more important...

    Man seems intent on destroying something - anything - as long as he is proving his might and acquiring things selfishly. We have not learned and I fear that we will not ever learn. Whether that leaves us forestless and with a fair few less of us than are here now, who knows? but nothing good can come of our current plight, surely.

    Just a couple of quick suggestions to possibly improve the flow even further (it's already very good)

    First stanza: 'Place YOUR ear upon the bark'

    Third stanza: I wouldn't contract the 'what's' at the end, ie, 'what IS good'.

    Fifth: 'The forests are ALL gone'

    ^^

    All up to you, Michael, but either way, an important and well written piece.

    All the very best,

    Ben