Comments : Sleep baby sleep within this magical lullaby deep.

  • 12 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    "Tonite" in the third line of the first stanza should be "tonight" and "hide n seek" in the fourth line of the third stanza should be "hide and seek"

    Other than those ^^^ minor errors, I deeply enjoyed in this piece. Your mentioning of the mythical creatures is really effective. I admire enchanting atmosphere that you created through the piece. The repetitions of the lines worked really well from the beginning to the end, you managed to create very unique rhythm. I love this piece, it is captivating and breathtaking, very heartfelt. Your descriptions are simply remarkable, the pictures that you portrayed with such vivid imagery within each stanza brought me to a magical, poetic journey. This poem is certainly going to my favorites, it is truly wonderful.
    Keep writing, you have a way with words.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Wow.. this is such an enjoyable read... i love children poems and the cute characters... so much innocence reflected by your poem... I simply adore these characters... its reminds me of my childhood days when I tried to stay awake just to see a fairy coming down to earth....

    very well written...simply brilliant...

    keep writing.. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by gracey grey

    Omg.....a magical ride that was going through every line.Very cleverly annd meticulously written.It was even better with all the meanings given.Otherwise it would have been french to me! lol! Keep up the good work.

  • 12 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    An absolutely beautiful and touching piece of poetry

    Constellations North Pole star is waiting so is your Hippogriff
    Soar high above to the land where beaver's talk, Chimeras catwalk
    and Silent Satyr's paint dreams all over moonlit coral reef
    Wayward Singing Bards recite nursery rhymes as Cerebrus Salsa rock.
    ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
    a magical stanza that stood out well to me

    a fantastic piece, Karan.

    You are a very talented writer.

    Keep it up! 5/5

    Keep Writing, lovely
    As Always,

  • 12 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    Beautiful piece. I loved it. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by June

    A very beautiful poem.I really enjoyed reading it.

  • 12 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    That is an extravagent Child poem-I'm adding it to my favorites so I can read it to my children one day. Great poem-I couldn't stop smiling and I didn't understand what half the creatures you wrote about were until the bottom explanation.haha-Keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by Megan

    Oh my,
    that was a very lovely poem.
    i noticed you commented one of my poems..and i thank you..but now i'm a bit embarrassed because i know that my poetry is nothing compared to yours...but eh, i'm still young. i'll get better.
    I love how i can picture the story as i read.
    One of the best poems i've read!
    keep up the great work :)
    thanks again for the comment.

  • 11 years ago

    by Until Again

    This was a most unusual read. I enjoyed it a great deal. It helps open my mind to a different way to write. Love the images, many of my favorites in dreams as a child. UA

  • 11 years ago

    by Arun Khan

    Absolutely genius!
    regards Arun.