Comments : On Our Old Wooden Bench

  • 12 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Sad. I could really feel what you were saying.

  • 11 years ago

    by kelleyana

    I just love this. I could relates to it. Keep it up, kel.

  • 11 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    This is really good. i like poems that don't follow a rhyme scheme and this one is amazing
    my favourite line is:

    the things that don't really matter but strangely mean the world to me.

    the only thing i would say is that it lacks any subtlety, maybe you could have used more metaphors or imagery. although i do lurveee the one about the willow trees.

    however i think the rawness of this poem almost makes it, something may be lost if you tried to make it a literary masterpiece.
    anyway, keep it up