It was good and I enjoyed reading it. I don't usually read poems in the Dark category, the title really captured me. I liked how it was sort of like a nightmare, but it was a real-life issue for her.

~Kail

The way you put diologue between stanza's is very interesting and a nice twist to the poem. I really liked the way you wrote this though, as one of the other commenters (the tasteless) said, it is a bit cliche and the ending is predictable- but for me, that doesn't change the quality- it is relatabl;e, yet stil fantastical in it's own way. your writing is very good and you have a lot of talent. nice work

This is an intense well written dark poem that delivers the feelings of Hysteria very well

I loved it!
a great poem, verry difforant. the words were perfect but the flow was odd... but thats what made it so unique. =] i really injoyed reading it.
5/5 keep it up. =]

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Wow... it is a DARK poem... so well written...
the breaks btween the stanzas makes more impact on the readers..

'Here it comes, her end has arrived,
Disturbed thoughts echoing in her mind.
She can feel the walls closing in on the dark,
Mixture of blood and dark making her blind.'

^^ very well written...

keep writing...:)

The poem is nice... 5/5

I love this poem. ill have to admit the ending was very surprising yet the perfect ending just the same. keep it up!
-lostsoul13-

I did like this poem,it is really more than fantastic..keep it up5/5

-Disturbed thoughts echoing in her mind.
She can feel the walls closing in on the dark,
Mixture of blood and dark making her blind.-
it almost brought a chill. loved the image of the walls closing in.
"Scream, little girl, but no one can hear.
I can smell your sweat and fear."

i've readen it a few times, but i can't figure out, -what - whos - speaking

powerful poem
5/5

An absolutely marvelous dark piece of poetry. painful but great to read, as i can see how much work you have put into it.

Whispers of torture are all she can hear,
So she grabs the knife from the shelf.
Plunging the blade deep into her side,
She realised she was running from...herself.
^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
i think most people are running from themselves. i know i am. that's probably why this stanza touched me greatly.

a brilliant read and a fantastic write.

5/5

Will read more in due time.

Keep Writing, lovely
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~