Wow, Mark.

what did people think of me
and did I ever show?
the real Mark inside my heart
and did they ever know?
^^ I love how you put your name in this poem, because it makes it so personal. It's like you're letting the reader get a peek inside your head. Letting them know your thoughts.

is our purpose in life to bread?
or the lonesome road to wards our death?
what will I ever think
when I lie in my bet, hungers for one last breath
^^ Okay. I'm going to fix some little mistakes in here, but I'm not sure if I'm right. Haha. In the first line "bread" should be "breed". In the second line "to wards" should be "towards". In the last line "bet" should be "bed".

have I made it this far
only so that I can die?
or is there another chance
for me to say goodbye?
^^ Oooh. I love questions in poems.. they really get the reader thinking. Sometimes deeper than the writer intended them too, but I think it's always good to put questions in poems.. as long as you don't over do it.

This was really great, Mark. I enjoyed reading it. :]

Keep writing!
Cayce