Ur words r absolutely right..... with this poem...

D boat can nbattle all storms n waves.... Only if u believe n d captain...... Evverything including d ship n sailors depend on d captain...

Ya cowards run away like mice...... Mice r d first ones to panic n runaway in times of calamity...

This one is gr8 with a moral from Miss Noorie...

Keep it up..

Best wishz...

I agree with Karan! this is a very important poem in many ways! well written, Noor!

take a look at my new poem "The grass is freaking black on the other side of the fence"

This poem has an extremely good meaning, and I really like it. There is a couple grammatical things that disrupted it, but your emotions and thoughts still got through AMAZINGLY well! I think that the title should be something more...ominous, you know? It'll add some dimension.

Great job!

My favorite..very inspiring
thx for sharing

AWWWW this poem touched my hearet. so nicely done.. great work.. u r a good writer....

Wow... such a motivating work...
beautiful....
the idea... the optimism... behind every line is wonderful... superb write..

"When it is time to fight for your life
cowards run away in the first moment
The brave ones will fight for the last
Don't abandon your boat captain
it is not the boat's fault you went in wrong direction "

^^ beautifully written...We have to stuggle in every step to gain what we want in our life.. only then we would have lived our life completely...so beautifully described here...
the last line is amazing...

Very well done...
keep writing... :)

Your poem had very deep meaning and inspiration when it comes to having faith
KEEP WRITING

"When the life messed up"
-This isn't worded right to me. Maybe you meant to say.. "When life got messed up"?

"You are loosing your faith"
-Losing not loosing. Same as the other sentence.

"Look up the sky and think"
-You need at between up and the. :)

"if every time we made mistake"
-You need a before mistake..

"everything would erased clean"
-I think you should add be after would

"Would we learn not hurt others?"
-You need to between not and hurt.

"don't find a solutions from escape"
-Did you mean to say .."Don't find solutions from escape" or "Don't find a solution from a escape" ? or something different? Wording is really weird here.

"it is not the boat's fault you went in wrong direction "
-put "the" between in and wrong

-Blah. Okay. Overall, a really nice poem. However, I don't know if it's were you come from and don't insert the words that need to be there.. like the and a or other simple words.. I think you need to put them in there.. Otherwise the poems flow takes me to a place where I don't even know where.

4/5

A very inspiring poem.
it was simply beautiful.
yet so so true. job well done!!

When life is getting hard
and you know it is your own fault
Don't run away from things
don't find solutions from escape
The truth will never burn in fire
it will come up, sooner or later

this is so right ,and truly this poem helped me out so much ,coz i sometimes feel so lonely and depressed ,lost and thinking of my mistakes and sins that i committed!
this poem was like a medcine for me..
May god bless You