I love the ending.. It's so relatable.

Wow, this poem is very touching.

Hey Loni,
wow great job on this one
and congratulations on breaking free
and following what you want.
This poem was written in a really different style
to your usual poems
which is great.
Like they say,
variety is the spice of life.
Always remember to follow YOUR dreams
do the things YOU want to do
and despite what anyone says
do the things that make you happy
don't do something just for the satisfaction of someone else.
I thought this poem was great and really showed you going free.
5/5

love
shellaine

This is great, and a lot of people can relate, you got your message across very clearly.

"Listen, you've been carrying
My heart since day one
And knowing you,
The journey's just begun"

Good word choice, this poem definetly came straight from your heart, good work!

It's so hard to leave someone you love, or once loved. But I suppose that it is for the best... sometimes. I really liked how you worded this.

"Since you don't care and just don't have a clue
I'll be leaving you as it seems"
-this part caught my attention. There is a lot of feeling behind it. More than just words.