A wonderfully penned piece of poetry!

My hand, It feels so cold
It needs warmth, but no one to hold
It's hard to handle
burned in the candle
^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
fave stanza. i don't know why but it kind of stood out to me.

i believe you worked very well on this piece.

it touched me.

5/5

Keep Writing, lovely
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Ok I agree with the other two comments. It really touched me. To be honest, I got tears in my eyes because it hit home so much. The piece was very well written and put together nicely. Your emotion behind it was outstanding. 5/5! Keep it up!

Confused by the own mind
on things, it's hard to decide
what's happening?
-like poems that have a strong begening, good job
My ears, They can't hear
no sound no cheer
the tone is so clear
It hears nothing but the cries
the lies and painful goodbyes
--listen harder to hear the happyness in life
it starting to loose
it's going to fall apart
--ended so sad
ravished by ecstasy
tortured by pain
damaged by the rain
abandoned by emotions
drowned in the oceans
--fav. part
5/5

The vocabulary here was plain.
I liked the meaning,
Although it wasn't hidden.

It was pretty straightforward.
Pretty much your title gave it away.

I don't know.
I just believe there's room for improvement in here.

It also kind of reminded me of a childroons rhyming thing.

Erm...
I dont' know if other people thought it that way.
It's probably because your a lot of your stanzas rhyme.
And they were unpredictable.
I don't think you want yours to be a children's rhyming thing when you're talking about self weakness.

Wow good poem i loved how you described the senses and the mind in the poem5/5

Your theme is good here.
Your rhythm and rhyme schemes are all over the place making for a difficult poetic read.
Third stanza first line, "eyes" dose not agree with "sees", when reading further I feel "eye" is what you want.
Last stanza line 8 I think you mean to use "loosen" rather then "loose" as I don't believe "loose" can be the object of the preposition "to".
Oh, my weakness is I am too truthful.
As always an opinion.

I am a big fan of this Dylan style of writting most us us are weak in the sense you wtite about It is refreshing the no we are not alone

Good job done here...
it wonderfully rhymed and flowed..

it seems a lot of frustration.. remorse is hidden ... and through these words you have let all your emotions flow...

good read...
keep writing..