Very good poem! I liked the illustrative nature of it. It was also very powerful and emotional. Keep up the good work.

Alright.

I thought this poem was really vague.

You could've made this more interesting.

Like when you said,

I feel nothing,

Erm,
Explain the nothingness.
Is it in your soul?
Your heart?
Or is it your ego?

You could've turned that into.
Something more creative.

Like "The ocean with no water"

Turn it metaphorically.
Make the readers TRY to understand it.
Don't just give it away.

This poem is very good i love it you can really feel the emotions in the words

They emotion in this piece is good I like the way you ended it and I could relate to what you wrote.
A coulple of mistakes:
"every so little" - ever so little
"Sometimes hear your voice" - sometimes I hear your voice
Except for this the poem was very well written.

Perfectly express ur emotions here, and the flow even the rhyme was good, all the words are very expressive and it touches everyone's heart. great job 5/5

"The everything started to crash and burn"

Passion could be the everything that burns but it is no fun to crash
perhaps you meant
Then everything started to crash and burn
Your feeling are expressed well in each line
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

There are some statements in this poem that don't make sense, I feel nothing? then you write a mass about how he or she effected your life. finishing with tears fall strange.
4/5 Ray S

I liked it losing that summer someone is something alot me people im thru so its easy to relate to it was a little vague but thats how memories get so i think it was presented well to fit the poem good job