Comments : Is this all there is?

  • 15 years ago

    by XxBrokenInsidexX

    "funnily, i thought the sky would fall down,
    the birds would stop singing,
    the world would stop spinning,
    everyone would stop grinning.
    this planet would fall apart,
    just because you didn't love me
    anymore."

    -I loved these lines...because We really do expect all this to happen...Well its what I thought would happen...But its just what happens in our minds...

    This poem was beautifully written I could relate to it alot
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by amber

    I love it....sorry this isn't longer.
    thanks
    ~*~Amber~*~

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Funnily, i thought the sky would fall down,
    the birds would stop singing,
    the world would stop spinning,
    everyone would stop grinning.
    this planet would fall apart,
    just because you didn't love me
    anymore.

    oh what a great example and description of the feelings .. simple adn striaght to the point , explain how many of us feel ,
    i notice that you write in simple ways , too like me

    even the poem dont ryhme the traditional rhyming i enjoyed reading it

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    Revise this .. It's got alot of silly typo errors . This is also really sad . I can so easily relate to it .. It's rediculous . I have no suggestions really since it's freeverse . Another 5<5 though .