A sad poem but really beautifully expressed, everyone of us had passed hard times in his life and sometimes one may think like this

Very well written....
the first part is so calm and composed... gives you a refreshing feeling...

the last stanza was a surprise for me... but very well written..

'I look out the window
does it matter at all
who is waiting you there
Here is no one to wipe your tears
And all you want to know
is that you're loved'

^^ how true... everyone wants to be loved...they want someone to be there to wipe their tears.. but if you are lonely fellow... the pain of lonliness could kill...

beautiful poem...

keep writing..

'different destination
same direction'

these lines can have very different meanings depending who's looking at it. It's a really good way of stating that...makes me think, that's good!

'All the exists are closed
you hold a knife in your pocket
ready to kill all your dreams
so none of them would be alive
because tomorrow you are already gone'

Wow. That's freakin' powerful, and undoubtedly my favorite part of the poem. It's just...the metaphor, the personification, beautiful! And very sad.

This is a really great poem! Great job...

Love is playing with my heart again
filling all the holes and I
just need another white paper
to write a letter to God
An angel walks by you
the walls are hard and white

those lines blew me away! amazing!!

That was different n uniquely paced from all ur writes b4... nsumwat dark... sum wat mysterious thoughts.....

Great job....

Keep it up...

Best wishz...

Karan

Noor, a beautiful write!

When the tears are
pouring down my face
Standing alone in a crowd
underground full of people
different destination
same direction
You smiled
it was beautiful
^ You have introduced the scene do well. Two souls exchanging a timeless moment in a crowded busstling place.

I look out the window
does it matter at all
who is waiting for you here
there is no one to wipe your tears
And all you want to know
is that you're loved
^ Leaving the security of home to travel to the unknown. A great description of inner fear and insecurity.

Love is playing with my heart again
filling all the holes and I
just need another white paper
to write a letter to God
An angel walks by you
the walls are hard and white
^Having unwavering faith keeps one calm when the world seems so tough. Life is easier with love in your heart.

all the exists are closed
you hold a knife in your pocket
ready to kill all your dreams
so none of them would be alive
because tomorrow you will be already gone
^This is a shocking end. Maybe I have misinterpreted it, maybe this person's faith was not enough? Sometimes there are people who just cannot, or will not be saved!

Well done

Michael x

A little confusing in the last two paragraphs......but the reat of it is beautiful.

Nice 1

Great poem. Written greatly

Oh my this was just heartbreaking. The ending was unexpected and truly left me breathless which was amazing. Your choice of words were flawless in expressing you emotions and conveying your message. The rhythm was great and nothing seemed out of place or forced.

"Love is playing with my heart again"
^I liked how you worded that because love does play with our hearts and sometimes we win and sometimes we lose.

Well done *5/5*

I love this, it's really moving, I really liked how you used and grasped the language. 5/5