Natalie, this is an excellent piece full of depth and layers.

I love the way you express your emotions in such an intellectual way. I especially love the second stanza. The venom is pure hate and gives me chills!

Well done xx

Wow this is some deep stuff girl great job excellent

Right from the first line I've fallen in love with this poem.

Hot damn Nat this poem was bloody brilliant. Each line I have something to say something about it. All the lines are just wonderful. The metaphors you used were wonderful and I could picture what your words were describing.

Not to mention the meaning of the poem. A true purpose. A chance to change the world. Great topic and you know I wish to do the same.

I realllly enjoyed the poem about stroking pens and who will read. That snapped the reader out of the trance and went...hey....she's talkin' to me! Lol. Five out five although you deserve much much more.

"Unpeel all the layers of my incomplete soul,
And expose my weak embryonic identity,"
-Oh! Unpeel..XD what a nice word choice, Nat. :]

Great poem. Excellent word choice. Great flow! No flaws as far as I could tell. Great write!! 5/5

Coolness in the poem natalie. great job.5/5
**harlea

"Unpeel all the layers of my incomplete soul,
And expose my weak embryonic identity,
Submissive to the torrents of the world,
My quest in this life is softly being defined."

Such strong words and emotion used here. This truly amazed me.

"Purple swaying of pink flowers, colours are dead,
The rainbow is a threat to man's heterosexuality.
Love is stabbed, raped and spat on. A true tragedy,
My body is merely a carrier of a superior purpose. "

Your use of imagery was very well shown. And you used point of views of different people. You made me see things in a different light.

This poem was very good. Great to see things shown in a different way.