Well this poem was hard to read i dont think it recognized your apostrophes right so that will probably need to get cleaned up but other than that it looks really good

Oh crud thanks for pointing that out it did that with another poem.. i'll sort it out now!

This is really good, I liked how you were so descriptive, here is just a thought:

"Or when I wake up in the morning,
And the light is lightest yellow,"

I think it would sound a bit better like this:

"And the light is its brightest yellow,"

Having the two lights in one line, kinda threw me off. Just my suggesstion, you don't have to change it if you don't want to. Take care! :)

I liked your poems message about simple things, people tend to forget them. However i believe that you can develop some description and better transition so the reader wont get confused. But really your starting out way better than i did trust me.^^

Thank you for the read

you a new poet just starting to bloom
and you shouldn't be worried about
what people think of your poems dont
ever say that you know the poem is'nt
good because then you don't believe
in your own words. again i think that
you are a talented young poet and that
you have a lot of potential.

thanks again

:~)Sam Mayo:~)

Ps follow the words

This is a nice poem good job!