This is really good... it reminds of myself, but i've never really BEEN with my guy... just a couple voice messages hear and there...

but its REALLY good.

You were alway thinking about me
and i never really knew
all i kno is i was thinking about you too
about how wonderful you are
and that love felt touch

this is such a sweet start... its really subtle and yet it clearly shows your view of love... this is one of my FAV stanzas in this poem... it shows that you love him, but he loves you too... you guys love each other so much, i can tell.

I've never loved someone so much
we talk late at night
about what i really feel
and how it never seems to go right
and on niht you made a vow to me

this is a really good sign of love. talking a lot with a guy isn't an easy task unless you guys are falling for each other... also, sharing your problems and your feelings with a guy shows how much he cares about you. not a lot of guys will put up with that.

you promised never to break my heart
you promised we would never be apart
so far your words are true
and i hope your words arent hers too

I can sense some foreshadowing here... i can feel something's about to happen. foreshadowing isn't very easy to incorporate into poems, yet you managed to achieve it. I can sense something about to happen....
Also, your use of the pronoun "her" creates and unsteadiness to your relationship that the readers foreshadow too.

they mean so much to me
make me feel like i belong
no matter what i feel wrong

a guys words are comforting and longing... but we girls have to be careful and pick out which are true and which are just plain bologna.

just because of age we really cant be
why cant people see
you really do love me for me

love shouldn't be shrouded by age. age should be no problem, unless you guys are like half a century apart... but this is clearly not what you are talking about... people should really learn that love is an attachment you can't really control... and age isn't something that can cloud that over.

we dont do anything but cuddle
and people get all mad and angery
but strangely i dont care
cause all i really need,
is for you too be there.

this is my other FAV stanza. Your opening and closing stanzas are so sweet and meaningful. You're right, you shouldn't care what others think about your love. I know that can be hard at times, but as long as you're happy, other people shouldn't be a problem. And they shouldn't realize that too.

This was a really good poem. It reminded me of myself, how people are always saying to me, "give up on him, he's never gonna know." cuz i've loved this guys for 3 years now. But i don't listen to them; i can't control my love for him. It's not something you can choose overnight.

I can relate to this poem so velly velly mucho. I loved IT!!!

Keep writing and pm me with updates!!!

~Sophie~

YEA THATS EXACTLEY HOW I FEEL I MEAN HE IS 3 Years older than me but we cnt be