"I'm standing upon a ledge,
Afraid to take that leap.
But I know if I don't now,
I never will."

This sounds good, but shouldn't it be "I'm standing on a ledge?" But I can see your imagery here. I think many of us have seen this in movies how theirs a person jumping off a bridge, or about to actually. Thats what I see when I first read this first stanza.

"I look over the edge,
And in my imagination,
I see your beautiful face before me."

This sounds so sweet, to me this sounds like your about to die, and when you do, or before you do you see what heaven is to the person, and to this person heaven is the beautiful face of the person that he or she loves. That would make anyone smile

"My body gets warmer,
And the butterflies in my stomach won't go away.
Which makes me realize that no matter what,
My temperature rises each time your around."

That sounds like a definition of what love would be to you. Love means many different things to many different people and this sounds like a first love, unsure of everything but it feels good. "Butterflies" I like this everyone can relate to this. They would understand this stanza very well and clearly.

"Making me more afraid to take that leap,
That leap of faith to fall in love with you."

I like how you put this, I've always been unsure of how to say I'm scared to love you in my poetry. And I'm highly sure other people will relate to this, There are people out there who are scared to love, actually scared to love and get hurt. So your not alone there.

"My legs before me begin to tremble,
As I begin to lose control of my balance.
I'm scared to fall for you,
Because I'm afraid to know what comes after."

As I said, its not just love that this person is scared of, "I'm afraid to know what comes after" its whats after the love, more love? or pain? Greatly put Its honest and to the point which is a good thing in poetry.

"But I know that if it's not now,
It'll be never.
So I'm ready to jump and fly,
For now I know that if I take that leap of faith;
I'll be taking that one chance before it vanishes before my eyes. "

I like how this stanza ties everything you said together. "But i know if its not now" You've said this earlier in the poem and I like that you repeated it.

"I'll be taking that one chance before it vanishes before my eyes. "

This reminds me of the stanza where you said that you see his/her beautiful face in front of you. This was a good ending to your poem, summing up and tying up everything you said in the poem. Good work! Keep it up! 5/5

What a wonderful way to describe the fear of opening up your heart to someone.

Courtship certainly does feel a bit like a bungee jump. You know it is going to be thrilling, but you also know that it is potentially has a deadly end! You know, if you succeed, you will have conquered your fear and your gamble would have paid off! You are encouraged to jump into the unknown, for a chance of happiness, so you let go of fear and fly into?

Well done

Michael

Ah, here we are. I began to read this yesterday until Kip called. :)

Ooo, that's a nice inspirational ice breaker poem. :) It's good because a lot, if not everyone, can relate to the issue of wanting to do something, but not at the same time. You tackled the subject nicely through this poem and I reward you with a five out of five.

Let me be the first to tell you Congrats on winning the song titled contest this week!

I just loved the suspense and power here! Yes Temps please take that leap of faith because you never know what good and come out of it. Everyone is afraid to fall in love because they dont want to be hurt but if you never fall then you will never find true love. Be brave my dear and go after what you want because your feelings are so pure and true.

Well done on this piece *5/5*

I love this poem.

Your last verse is a beautiful finish to amazing writing

5/5

I liked it. it had a strong beginning and really pulls the reader in and makes them interested to want to read more. the middle wasn't as strong, but you picked it up at the ending with daring to actually take that leap. great read.

"All these feelings for you reappear,
Which make me fall for you harder,
Making me more afraid to take that leap,
That leap of faith to fall in love with you."
love that =]
i like how the whole thing is like a metaphor
sorta =] and how u r gonna make a "leap"
sweet =]
5/5

I liked this poem

it felt slightly repeditive
like trying to comvence ones'
self to take that path without
looking back.

I liked the feelings that I got from it
It made me like the poem more

I am afraid that you might Have gone a little over the edge with the "speaker" convincing
themselves TOO much.

but the poem moves easily from start to finish.

A very enjoyable read that begins very well for the first two stanzas and then gets verbose and sends the rhythm somewhere that I could not locate. This may be a prime problem I alone have but I believe that words without rhythm are prose and those with rhythm are poetry and this rhythm must continue throughout the work. If this is solely "old school" and there is a new standard I am sorry.
I loved the story and your telling of it, your words bring unto the mind's eye everything that is involved in taking that first fatefull step in romance.

Wow! Amazing poem. I know that exact feeling the scared, uncertain, feeling of love. Not sure what's going to happen. Great thought for a deep poem. I love the symbolism of the leap and falling in love with someone. (5/5)

WOW i love this poem because its so honest love can be a very scary thing and some times you got to just let go

Absolutely beautiful!

i love every single line in this poem.. it was very imaginable.. the flow was perfect.. and such a true poem. its hard to let yourself fall in love but if you dont then you'd be left saying "what if" ..

nicely done.

5/5