Wow. Excellently written. Excellent word choice. I didn't really have a favorite stanza, they were all written very nicely. :] The rhyme was great.. You managed to stay with your rhyme scheme throughout the entire poem. Great work. You two put together a fabulous collaboration. ;) 5/5

Really good poem, with good word choice. Sometimes the rhyming was a little off, but mostly it had a really good flow. The stanzas went together nicely, too. you guys wrote a really good poem thats for sure. 5/5

You start out kind of rocky; since this was a collab, I supposed the both of you started out on different amounts of syllables. But as the piece continues, your flow becomse a lot better, and the words just drip off my tongue as sweet as honey.

I don't adore your word choice very much in this piece. The metaphors are beautiful, but it's just some of your decisions were somewhat bland.

"equal" in the very first stanza, sounds out of place to me, and I think it just bugged me that the beginning stanza was such a mouthful. But, the concept behind the verse is absolutely stunning.

Leafs and quick ideas shrivel and never last.
`The majority of the ending lines of each stanza, like this one, are absolutely AMAZiNG. You end each verse with a BAM! And it's just cor, the way it's worded and how deep the meaning goes.

I think it's a brilliant portrayal of life -- using a splendorous tree as symbolization, at least, that's how I interpreted it.

At times, your rhymes sound forced, like you couldn't think of anything better and just gave up -- or it could've been the person you collabed with, but either way.

Overall, this was pretty darned amazing. It's not your best, I'll give you that much, but it's high up there, love. Just excellentally written.

..__MiNDYY

The metaphors in this poem remind me of the deep rooted finger pointing folksongs of the 60s
The message is one I could ponder for days as any real poetry should be
It goes without saying that this poem has your trademark flawless flow
Well done

I love to tink u would read my poems and u write like this crap thanks for findin me damn i really do love this poem it's true the smartest and most artistic people are always outcasted and you never see every one in the crowed if any one I'll rate ^^
keep writing
Sami^^

Wow... a deep, a very deep piece of poetry. stunning choice of words and very well penned between the both of you. a wonderful collab. there was an amazing meaning there too. again, beautiful description and use of words.
a stunning read

5/5

Keep Writing, hun
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Hey ... this is simply awesome.... so beautifully written... the plight of nature,.. the destruction .. its wonderfully described...
sometimes I really wonder if we know on which path we r going by destroying the only thing due to which we r still living...

'A bearded sage equals a thousand year old tree
from their tall canopy the immeasurable world they see.
Deep sunken roots reveal man's poor written past.
Leafs and quick ideas shrivel and never last. '

^^ this is amazing stanza... very beautifully written..

loved this poem... great job done...

keep writing..

This was really well done, very good work work :)

Poem is deep :) minds are clever,mature,serious.words are nice (well i feel shame that one word i couldnt understand in the poem..bad english :( ... )
all in all this is a nice poem and the most thing i like on it,it is serious way of looking into nowadays life :) well done

Wow, that was really deep and your use of words was brilliant, the name drew me in and I am so glad that I read this poem!! it is amazing!! WEll donE!!

Wow, I'm blown away. I usually don't enjoy rhyming poems because of the unnatural emotions behind the rhymes but this poem is awesome. I especially like the topic and how instead simply writing out the problems directly, you take a poetic direction and use natural images and comparisons to strengthen the whole concept. Great job

I luv the flow, emotion and word choice in this poem. its really great . your an awsome deep writer =]

I liked this. It was well written, and I liked the rhyming.

"A bearded sage equals a thousand year old tree
from their tall canopy the immeasurable world they see.
Deep sunken roots reveal man's poor written past.
Leafs and quick ideas shrivel and never last."

^^ "Leafs" should be "leaves".

Other than that, it's very good. I also liked the word choice. Made imagery possible. :]

5/5

-Briana