Good write...
Its well written ..
"Hands frozen to a frosted window
Like a wet tongue hanging from a pole-
Dressed in white like a bride-to-be
Upon a broken pedestal."

^^I liked the first stanza most..it rhymed so well....

but I culdnt grasp the meaning of some lines... :)

overall a nice write...

keep writing...

I loved your last stanza and last line, the begining was a little hard for me to comphrehand but who know that could just be me and i mean no insult. nice work

The window broke from their force
Her dress faded from white to black

these lines i likes most :) it is so effective.but i cant lie,all poem is also nice and great written :) 5/5

I love this poem! I loved the use of Apollo (I am a slight fan of greek mythology ;) and your choice of words throughout the stanzas went very well with the poem and the tone of how it was written. Great work!

"Hands frozen to a frosted window
Like a wet tongue hanging from a pole-"
-Wonderful simile. I like the comparison. :)

"The flies gobbled them up one by one
And charged at my limp face
Sometimes leaving a smudge upon the frost
As a brown haunting print."
-Nice wording, imagery was great here.

"All the hopes and dreams from long ago
Spilled forth from the table of ruin
And all the gold shining trophies and happy photos
Ripped into pieces until nothing

...As I am second to none... "

-These have gotta be my favorite lines. :] I love how you ended with your title. It makes so much sense and a great way to end your poem. 5/5.

I loved your 1st stanza. it drew me in completely to your poem. while some of the lines were a little confusing to me, i loved the overall poem. your choice of words had an amazing effect on the tone. it was very deep. excellent job.

I really love this poem, you did a great job and it flowed really well, excellent job 5/5

Ooo this was amazing the wording was quite intriguing it had interesting points and was different!!! goodjob

Awesome...But I'm really sorry because I can't find the words that describe how fantastic was ur poem..U r talented and I enjoyed readin ur work
Keep it up5/5...
Take care and wish u all the best..

This is a well written poem. The first stanza drew me in, and was actually my favorite I think. [: Your vocab usage was superb, and the fluidity was nice as well. The metaphors in this piece are beautiful! What a different and refreshing read.

Great job,
keep it coming!

This poem has an amazing freeverse flow and the imagery delivered the emotion "Like millions of flies set loose from Hell"
I like it
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Wow. Everything about the piece was great the only line I though needed something more was this one.
Apollo fell from the sky-
^^
For me it didn't really go with the flow but that's just my opinion. I thought even though it didn't rhyme (which I rarely do) I was intrigued. A lot of poem that don't rhyme are all over the place but this was really good.
Adding to favorites
5/5