I think it is a very good , one ,but it need more rhyming !! but i love the expression though!

Amazing poem! Simplicity truly shown beneath these lines and yet the fragileness of our hearts continue to cause only ruptures and pain.
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Very nice poem. It's so hard to let go and it seems that the heart never heals, but instead loses a piece and becomes a bit less carring. I think that gave the perfect image of how it happens.