Oh wow that was amazing!!! i loved that with all my heart it was very very great!!!!!!

With broken wrists to mend. <------ I love this line, because you made it different. Instead of the same cliche "bleeding wrists" you changed it to broken. It's just a little thing, but it really set the tone of the poem for me.

She fell in love with the ocean
and all it's boiling black,
Dove deep, deep down to the bottom parts
with the plan to never turn back.
[This stanza. Just wow. It blows me away, because it's so creative, and exactly the way I feel sometimes.]

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

For Jesus loves his littlest ones
and to her drowing...he said no.
[Amazing ending! Omg, I never expected that ending! That's my absolute favorite part of this poem.]

Great job, Gabby!

Keep writing!
Cayce