Cool poem. 5/5
&& lesthat

Rage is my alter ego,
Revenge is locked away
Evil Darcy's revulsion
Is just waiting to repay.
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I am speechlessly after reading this. What a masterpiece , the emotion, rage and anger seeped through the monitor into my very soul. What a great write this is.
Great job

Michael.. This was really brilliant poem. You scare me sometimes.. ;) Well written....

"Commitments are defining,"

This line is so true. Couldn't have said it better myself. And it was a good way to start off a poem.

"My days and restless nights.
The unrelenting chanting,
Is too much for me to fight."

Many people can relate to this, Insomnia or no insomnia many people have had their share of restless nights and we can never change that. We just have to deal with it as it is.

"Words claw my fragile smile,
Trying to turn it upside down."

I've heard this said before in many different ways. But the way you said it was just beautiful. This is one of the reasons I love your work, it just comes out beautifully.

"Rusting nails pierce my heart,
I scream with silent frown."

I can understand you fully here. I know how it feels to be heart broken. There are many ways to describe a broken heart. whether it be knives being stabbed or the way you put it with rusty nails, that was put so bluntly.

"I bite my tongue and swallow,
This metallic tasting blood.
It fills my guts with poison,
These resented waters flood."

Very descriptive, you really did a good job with describing what blood actually tastes like.

"Such hate is burning larva,
It connects my brutal past."

Everyone has a deep dark past that sometimes they would rather not share. I've heard you use "Larva" to describe certain emotions in some of your other poems. And that is one word that sticks to my head. Its just so original, I've never heard it before and that is really inspirational.

"If you see me smiling,
Look in my damning eyes,
Glimpse a mind of vengeance,
Through the murderer's disguise"

I try to hide behind a smile, and pretend like everything is okay. But with anyone that tries to hide something, once you look into their eyes, as they say "the eyes are the windows to the soul" you can actually see true emotion even with the blackest of hearts.

"Antagonize, if you dare
To see if I'll explode,
Reveal my spitting demon,
His rawness is exposed."

I love how you used the word "Antagonize" its such a raw word and its used beautifully. amazing.

"Rage is my alter ego,
Revenge is locked away
Evil Darcy's revulsion
Is just waiting to repay."

Other personalities, or alter egos. Everyone has one. So many will relate to this stanza.

"My cell of flesh and blood
Has been stabbed for many years
Every time I had to swallow,
Cold blood or souring tears"

This is my favorite stanza. Why? because I can relate to this so well. We all have gone through our share of pain, some more than others. But this is why I love it. You wrote so that many will be able to understand this. They will relate.

"These walls have bled their strength,
Too long I've staved his will"

What I said earlier was my favorite stanza. This is my favorite line, I have many walls. that I try to break through but no matter how hard I do. I seem to slip back in to the comfort and solitude that they offer. I know what its like, so I sympathize with you on this one.

Yet another poem that Mr Darcy wrote that amazes me. Bravo.

Coolness poem mr.dacry. great job.5/5
**harlea

Commitments are defining,
Rusting nails pierce my heart,
I scream with silent frown.

It fills my guts with poison,
These resented waters flood.

I can feel it manifesting,
It connects my brutal past.

Look in my damning eyes,
Glimpse a mind of vengeance,

Antagonise, if you dare
Rage is my alter ego,
Revenge is locked away

Cold blood or souring tears

These walls have bled their strength,
Now born to bloody kill.

Had to shortlist your poem to somehow feel what you are trying to convey...............and the verdict...........atta boy never give up!......whether one likes it or not, humans possess two faces.............and when enough is enough, it means enough!!!!!! How long can one endure..............bottled feelings tends to explode revealing the darker side..........makes me wonder though, whether patience is virtue at all?.........Anyways this is just my opinion......all i all a great poem.

Man don't i just know how you're feeling,that used to be my one failing,giving in to it i mean.A brilliant poem that i thouroughly enjoyed,I don't think i've ever heard rage expressed so eloquently.

Grant

Wow. i must say I am so impressed. This poem was filled with some really extreme emotions. it was a really interesting poem.. you used some really good word choice. i was totally surprised by how great everything sounded. by the way, i love the title. great work as always.. 5/5 ..

Ooo so many vivid images through out it all

**Words claw my fragile smile**
that was my favourite, simple but intense

**This metallic tasting blood**
i would have never imagined describing bloods taste like that. very original

**souring tears**
love how this poem just turns on different senses
very cool poem
keep writing n_n

Wow, this was absolutely amazing,
there were so many thoughts in this poem
I loved it and am really impressed.
You've left me speechless,
Your words are truly haunting and pierce the reader like daggers.
It was such a graphic read.
Which was filled with intensity.
This was amazing!! Brilliant Job!!
Take Care

O.o

You are an amazing writer!
I don't even know exactly what to say...
You know I can relate. But... wow.
The rage behind every word was so powerful.
A flawless poem, nothing less.
You, sir, are mighty talented.
5/5, FOR SURE.

Love
Tina

P.S.> You read my rap? Hahaha oh jeez...

I love the syntax, and pragmatics within this poem, I admire the diction you so often use and I admire this poem too, you're poetry is an inspiration to younger potential poets.

Great Poem

These walls have bled their strength,
Too long I've staved his will
Darcy's rage erupting
Now born to bloody kill.

^^^My favorite stanza, Michael..
I know of this feeling you are writing about, the feeling of being defenseless and helpless and wanting to break free from the hurt..
Life is not fair, sweetheart..it is not that for any occupant on this earth. Grin and bear it has always been my motto, but maybe I will give in to the rage one day too and then you can visit me behind bars, lol

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid