My friend i sense a definite shift in your style but a good one,i like it very much though i dont know how long ago this was written but i thought it was very well written,an excellent poem.
Grant

This is a very interesting write.But it was well penned and I like the structure and flow

FIrst off I saw you talking to one of my best friends on peoms and quotes and I saw your poem about time. ''

I haven't seen this style before ...how you use.."I" and "You"

the way you explained all these wonderful things about someone and even yourself is really beautiful. Must have some deep poem eyes.
I notices in this line..
I,-------a leaf from a once mighty oak ,>>
ONCE mighty, the way you opened it was kind of sad. LIke going through a lot but still came out.
Nice read
-Angie

This is such a beautiful poem. It carried me into a lovely place of reflection. Thank you

Hi Jim,

You have moulded this verse into a beautiful format. A very creative and endearing write!
Your wife is a lucky lady:)

Take care!

Ingrid

And a blanket to warm you , until purpose softly whispers,-------come !

Flowing into the lakes of your valley, as you softly whisper-------stay!

---
those two lines are my favorite because to get to the very last word you have to follow that long line of dashes.
somehow pausing right there, made this the best poem ive read in a long time.
COME-STAY.
im really not sure why i find that style so wonderful.
also how both of those sentences have "softly whisper" in them.
imagery is great.
Yet another GREAT poem.
5/5

So deep yet you can still understand what it is that you are saying. I love this poem. It was quite pretty. Felt good to read. Rolled off the tongue nice. You are a great writer!
~Kayla

Very meaningful and to the point. I like it very much!

Always been that good
u dnt need my comments to know
that this poem
IS
a master piece

5.5
ur broken wing
Rania

keep writing

This Is An Amazing Poem.
Dont Let ANYBODY tell You Diferently.
I Loved It And Such Raw Emotion!
Keep Writing, PLEASE?!?:)
Im Going To Keep Reading Your Poems=D
5/5
It Would Be Great If You Could Comment And Rate My Last Poem? THANKS!

Much Love, Jessi.