"Because you will out of my life."
type there?
okay some hints
this was short and to the point. the problem with short things is its harder to make a big impact. the word choice was a little weak and the transitions were at odd points.
its a bit easy and shy to read. no images came to mind except the very beginning. i don't know but i thinkk its a bit weak.
but i did like it.

Lexie

Btw
4/5 imo

I was going to do sorta like blond genius did with that last line you had there.

i think it should be.
"because you will be out of my life"
instead of
"because you will out of my life"
becasue that would make a little more sense, i think.

with problems like that, I always reread over my poems after i submit them to see if i forgot something or not before i have people read them, thats a thing you could do so we won't find a mistake like you did with the last line and if not then its okay, im just trying to help.

but i did like this poem though, the thing is its like another original poem you know, i've read some ones like this, i thought it would be different just a tad but another way im not being mean by saying this all and i hope im not. This is a really good poem though, and people do go through this and it sucks.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

I agree with the "Blonde" and again the rhythm is not smooth, each line reading as a stand alone comment. Writing must have emotion but it can not be controlled by it.

This was really good. it expressed a lot of feelings and stuff that you had to get off your chest. it was good, but i almost thought maybe it was a little too simple. It really seemed like it was coming from YOU, but.. I don't know. I thought it was too simple.. and I felt like I wanted to read more. I think that it had an okay flow though, It flowed along pretty nicely for me. 5/5.

I get the feeling you put in this poem. you have to be strong to move on as you realize it's all over. but the poem seemed kinda not finished. i think you could work on it and develop it to make it more expressive.
for example, you repeat the same words: in the 1st stanza you say "perfect" twice, in 3rd stanza you repeat "move on"... try to find other words, for example perfect = ideal, or the best, whatever.... the poem will just look more colourful.
4/5

Awe. I love this piece; I feel the exact same way most of the time. I can relate to this perfectly. Very beautifully written. The end of the poem is amazing, and I absolutely love the title. It fits. 5/5

This was a terrific poem. It really portrayed how you felt and the fact that you kept moving on even though he kicked you out of his life shows how strong women really are. This read more like a story than a poem. So I gave it 4/5

I think this is a strong poem making the male relize what he has choosen to give away. i feel there is meaning in this poem. Men should be afraid of how strong women are! great job 5/5

The emotions that you express on this poem are very strong.
"It's gonna be hard to move on,
But my strength will keep me going."
loved that line because i've had to rely on myself to move on from someone i loved, too.
the flow could have been a bit smoother. but other than that, very nice job. beautifully written. (:
-Channa-

This was a very powerful piece of poetry, even with the poor wording. you put a lot of strength into this piece, making it amazing.
i agree with some of the above comments that the wording was poor and in need to be re-worded, but i also agree with Lizaveta that it didn't really seem to be a finished piece.
the flow, however, was great :)

4/5

btw, good luck with the contest :)

Keep Writing, hun
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Sad to know your story but I should say that your poem is well-written. I gave it topnotch marks :)

tc and be hopeful

Fsams