Wow strong feelings here good job mind your struicture a bit and the rhyming is acceptable in all a very good one fix it a buit though when you do PM me

I prefer if you join each 4 lines in a paragraph and shorten the second line somehow to enable a perfect line construction

get me?

It so short yet it holds so much power in it and sadness. i loved it

5/5

Wow i feel the exact same wya like all i ever do is fake everything to conceal my true thoughts and feelings i really love it! 5/5 xzxx <33

Wow goosebumps