by P00ki3B3ar
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            Very well written i like the way you ended with the "i bet i'd win this bet, cuz you're just too blind to see anymore.." | 
by Sourav
| Too much use of same word 'bet'. Doesn't sound that good. It's emotional and seems very personal write. It's good but you can make it better. | 
by LoveTear
| * Verry good ! Great work thanks |