Another cool write..it reminded me of mario's song..I dun wanna know..lolz..

Excellent..

Really good! Very open and shows some real strong emotion.

A couple of typo's and words which could be changed around but i wont go into all that.

"two people flirting like there was no tomorrow
i don't believe in love at first sight, though
with u i was caught instantly without doubt
i felt like i was knocked out"

^^ i can really relate to this part of the poem.

"nonstop to a road that ends in death
taking away my thoughts and my breath
just to 4get those feelings that made me feel good at a point in time
but know has me creating these depressing and suicidal rhyme"
^^think you might have put a few too many words in thesecond last line-but thats ok. it should also be "now" not "know" in the last line. This stanza is my favourite though. It is a great supportive finish.

I love poems where people write openly about their emotions. This one is carried by that element.

5/5, Aish
xx