A very sad and painfully expressed write. Every line and every word expresses so much of detail into the love that was once shared. Excellent work! 5/5 from me.

The first thing that captured my eyes was the goodness of your punctuation.And that was really heartfelt
My favorite ones are;

Such a big world and no one with me
I'm crossing the limit of my sanity
World seems so cold tonight - just like your hand
Why did you slip away make me understand

Keep it up,
Laura

Very well constructed...You have a very imaginative mind and you have no difficulties of writing it down...I liked the ending it was very powerful although filled with extreme deep sadness..

I hate the name "Jane". Sorry to burst it out. I can see a Tarzan movie on my head...monkeys running here and there. Lol to me.. :P

I know you chose Jane because it is easy to rhyme with something.

I like these lines
"Hopes are pale, lying like dead on the floor
Isn't it enough baby? Want to hurt more?"

I felt some pleasure inside my heart reading them...This is sad love story. You worked well with the flow. Brilliant.

I think you succeed with this poem... Everything...seems united. Story works, structure is nice. I just dislike the title for personal reasons... It is a vivid story...paints a lot of images.

Well done.

Amazing.. <3