I loved it the way it is..
it's a beautiful tragedy. =]
Great poem.
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I love it.
I Can Truly Feel What These 2 People Are Experiencing Just By Reading Your Words.
"Tres Bien" Meaning Very Well In French

I love it.
I Can Truly Feel What These 2 People Are Experiencing Just By Reading Your Words.
"Tres Bien" Meaning Very Well In French

Although he still wonders,
Late at night,
If he has the right girl,
To hug and to hold tight.

and try he questions and ponders,

brian mcphillips

I really enjoyed reading it .. especially at the beginning !
5/5

I've felt the same, if only I'd had the courage to admit it at the time. Well written, keep it up

Rebecca Sarah St.Croix Share some of your great talents with me :o plus this i AMAZINGG

Cute, love the emotion, very easy to connect with :)

5/5

Hey thanks for the comment... This was great poem! Rhythm was perfect, keep it up!

Ohmygoodness!!!!! i love it. it has strong emotion and a wonderful meaning. did i mention i love it? LOVE IT!!!!! nice flow. keep up the amazing work! ~KM~

Wow wow wow, amazing write. could really feel the emotions, think we have all been there, in those what if situations, this captures that so well and keeps us reading through the whole poem. well done.
5/5

WOw...it happened to me too..awww..good job..5/5

Oh my goddess, how can you say i have talent when you can write something like this.

i thought your other poem was good but this one is breath takingly beautiful and so heart breakingly sad yet sweet. ah, i wanna cry partly cuz i've seen this happen to me, except well i knew what he felt but i was to scred to go for it.

i love how you make the rhyme work, your read without realising it rhymes which is of course the art of a true poet.

i was really struck by the last stanza because of the regret you protray in it even though it not from either of their perspectives. so well done on that.

i look forward to reading more of your work so keep it up. and i really hope all these sad poems are not from experiance or if they are that they are past experiance you have not gotten over. here if you ever need a stragers ear/advice. 5/5
XxX Persian Princess XxX

Becca my love,
this is amazing :)
five of five,
keep up the excellent work ♥

THIS IS REALLY GOOD WORK I REALLY LIKED IT. KEEP WRITING. 5/5 OF COURSE

P.S. THANKS FOR COMMENTING MY POEM
VERYY MUCH APPRECIATED :)