Life's Paradise of tragedy

When you opened this up right away it made itself clear in what direction it was heading. Honestly, this is a great poem in the sense that it hits close to home. All anyone ever seems to talk about is the bad, and the worse. There is no real joy in the world anymore, at least not on the news. But we must keep some joy in our lives, lest we all go entirely insane. I like the blunt honesty in this poem because it compels the reader to listen to what you have to say.

Hopelessly they are colour blind though,
Due to unfortunate trickery and deceit... Called life

This is true, the world around us is full of beauty if only we could truly see it. You speak to the soul in this poem David!

Yet be quick! Be rash, be stupid and human.

Way to summon up humanity in a single line. That is probably our one major failing, rashness. You've touched the deeper roots of the issue at stake here.

Cover the pain; futilely store the aching soreness away
Disaster and loss don't matter. Are simply unimportant

It's easier to store the pain away than to face it openly. It's certainly easier, but not always right. But we as humans are invariably drawn towards what is easier, and then we pray for the best. You're a great poet David and I can't wait for more of your work. =]

*Danielle

I like how you make your descriptions here. Especially the part about life. 5/5

Cool but..Perfect, with its impurities...sounds good but can you please explain, thankyou
rach=)

Cool but..Perfect, with its impurities...sounds good but can you please explain, thankyou
rach=)

So good. i love it. you still can write the most amazing poems. love it for realz. byez