I loved the title. The poem itself was very good, there is a variable amount of good description here, all pertaining to that one situation which, in this poem would be seclusion from others, the ones that have fallen and can't find a way to get things back on track again because they are consumed by eternal apathy. Some of the stanzas were very catchy and had well served imagery. I think the second or last stanza may have been my favorite.

Formally I like the descriptive style that I picked up on from reading this, so for this poem I would say you did very well. Excellent work.

Wow. I absolutely love this piece. It's a very relateable feeling to feel like you are alone and nobody really cares. Umm, the flow of this was extremely great hun, the poem flowed very smoothly. Overall, a very amazing write. Great work. 5/5. (:

It's decent. I know the feeling, been there for years. I suggest you bomd it through some minor errors such as were when you meant we're. At least, you might have meant that. I also think this poem could have been able to stand out more if you had used some imagery or poeteic devices inside it, that way it wasn't just a narrative and you could have made it that way to let people feel what the person talking must feel. By now the reader knows the point of view that you used, using the words we or we're more than once is really unneeded. I'm not fond of the last line in the first stanza either. Don't know why.

Try reading it aloud and seeing if you could feel the emotions you are trying to display. This will help you grow as a writer. Though again, everyone's style is different.

I meant comb it but heck I can't spell sometimes

Ah! I really liked this a lot. I thought it was well written, and the rhymes were pretty good.

"Walking along side the shadows
'The Invisible' as we're known
This is the anthem to anyone
Who's ever felt, alone"

^^ In the last line, the comma is not needed before "alone".

"We'll forever be the darkness
Lurking around the corners of light
Waiting to find another one to fall
And show them our way of life"

^^ I think you should rethink "life" & "light" as rhyming words. They don't actually rhyme.

Despite those couple of things, I liked the choice of words you used in this piece, and I feel like a lot of people can relate to it. Good job. 5/5

``Briana

I thought this was very well written. Most of your rhymes worked out perfectly. I really really enjoyed the story of this poem. I think..haha I have like four ideas of what you were talking about. I over think things a lot. XD

Well done.

I really enjoyed the last stanza btw. Finished your poem nicely.

Beautifully written. You captured the emotion so well.

This is very deep... wonderful write... I could feel what you want to portray here...

"Lurking around the corners of light
Waiting to find another one to fall
And show them our way of life "

^^ loved this stanza...

keep writing..

This is my personal favorite poem that has a folk depth to it

My favorite quatrain is
Walking along side the shadows
'The Invisible' as we're known
This is the anthem to anyone
Who's ever felt, alone"

It reminds me of a Dylan lyric "Walking through the leaves falling from the trees feeling like a stranger that nobody sees"

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