Comments : Tell Me*

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    `Title: It fits the poem pretty well, because you repeat.. "Tell me" throughout the poem. Good choice.

    First stanza, flowed smooth like cutting butter.. it was a great stanza and a pretty good opening I thought.

    Second stanza, flowed well just like the first stanza.. it fit the first stanza well, it's kinda a little cliche for me, but I think it'll do.

    Third stanza, loved it. Great flow once again, everything is coming together beautifully.

    Fourth stanza, great job. It was worded well and you put it all out there in the last stanza.

    Overall, a good poem.. well expressed, kinda cliche, but what do you expect? it's a love poem. :] 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Well this is definately the risk you take when you choose to be in a relationship and then happen to fall in love. I thought the flow was pretty good, a little off at times but nothing to bad. I think it is a good poem, but not an amazing poem and I know that you can write way better :) I gave it a 4/5 great job though GG23

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    A beautifully written love poem, filled with so much emotion and feeling.

    "Tell me what you get from this,
    Because all I get is pain,
    Tell me why you keep doing this,
    You have nothing left to gain."

    I love your rhyming and flow here, and your words are so heartfelt, nice job! Keep writing, always and forever...

  • 11 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    I love your rhyming and the flow of the poem. It was obviously written from your heart. I really liked the ending the most.