Oh, the ending just gets to the reader
this is sad, and so real

you sound like a friend of mine in this poem,
you speak very lovingly
another 5/5

I really liked this piece. The rhyming was excellent. However, I do feel as though it might be easier to read had it been separated into stanza's. Though, you are the writer, and you wrote how you wanted to. I must be honest, though -- I do believe that I have read better from you, but this was still enjoyable. 5/5

``Briana

Poem is nice. It is enjoyable piece to read. Well done, my friend. :)

I think this poem is very interesting. Yes, you made me very curious...I was start thinking if this fictional or based on real event.. ;) (yes, I am too curious, sorry!!)

Something troubled me a little in this poem was these line "You know you can't be true
It looks like we are through" and "Don't let darkness get to you
Before the light shines right through".... Through again?? Well...this was my view point. It is your poem.

Maybe you should seperate this poem to stanzas... It is a little difficult to read (for me).

From this poem I get the feeling you are kind person... :) A good friend...

The light that will set you free
Is the truth that will always be.

Okay, I have to smile at this because it's the ONE place you puta period. Tee hee. ^_^

I can really relate to this poem. Just being fed up with trying to reach out to someone and they won't let you. It hurts. A lot.

Nothing hurts more than knowing you can't help who you want to help the most.

You wrote this poem nicely. The rhyming and metaphors worked nicely.

Five out of five.

Love the choice of words! You got your point across so simply! But i think it would have been betta if u stuck 2 the same ryhme scheme other den dat it was great!

I really enjoyed this poem as this is something i could relate to...
its very deep and so much meaning!

I really like this poem!!
It was awesome.
I love the whole concept..

I love every word in this poem. the flow was right there. even tho u try n try n she doesnt get it. she doesnt get though her mind just dnt give up. in time she'll get what u r trying to say over n over again. just dnt give up on a friend. nicely done here.

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy