This is good.
Very good.

How is it you are not on everyones favourites yet?

Your descriptions and your words are very powerful, and they create perfect images in the readers mind which is what every poet should aim for.
Kudos to you, great work. Absolutly nothing needs changing.
5/5

jess ~

Bravo! this was fantastic. it was powerful and quite deep. you expressed yourself very well.

Your wings of gold have turned to stone.
Your bright eyes, burned out.
Your glow now white as the ashes.

those were my favorite lines. very creative. i love your writing technique, very unique. job well done again. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

Wow! This is a great poem. . . Dark, yes, but still very powerful!. . . . Good Job!

5/5.
Keep it up! 8).

Dude love this poem a inner darkness that's coming in the heart love it keep it up 5/5