Comments : The world

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Way to short in my opinion, I think you could add a lot more on. But what you have is pretty good.

    "My love for you floats like a fragile butterfly bounded only by the height of the sky for te world i'd travel to be with you"

    te should be the.
    And a few commas are need in this, so it isn't just one really long sentence.

    Keep writing, always and forever...