Great story line and pretty good poem all around! i really liked it but if i make one comment i'd say the rhyme scheme is a bit off i'd either go more rhyme or more open right now it's kinda in between... 4/5

I agree with the comment above this poem is very good,however you need a little bit of work on the flow.
A very imaginative piece, well done =]

Ok i'll be different here, i love the way this was written, idk why, i just do. :) lol i got chills reading it, and almost looked over my back.. ;-) 5/5

I liked this one it was really good

Interesting subject, pretty much unique

Another poem of good concept. It kept me interesting for the concept. I always enjoy different kind of poetry. This one is good.

Thanks for your comment.

wow youre really good :D

well done

That was amazing, it had a great story to it and was very descriptive.

Ok this is more my style...i love dark deep sneeky poems...you might have told from the poem of mine you commented on...but i do like this poem...the flows a little bit scratchy but the poem pulls together by the topic...good writing...

Wow-thus is really-i dunno-eerie? kinda sticks to the back of your mind..... i like it. The rhyme pattern is unpredictable but works-doesnt hinder the flow.
I really like this one!!!
5/5