Really good poem, i liked it. however some stanzas were jumpy but it really shows your emootions and what mood you were in whilst writing this.

Very nice.. shows yur emotion very well nd who its written keeps yur attention its jumpyish but thts wot I love 'bout it.. great job keep it up!!.. 5/5.. nd thanks fer the comment!!

"Tired eyes,
Shatter lies.
Weak gasps,
A broken past"

^My only suggesstion would be to change "shatter" to "shattered", to me it sounds better, just my opinion. Otherwise, good work. I can tell you wrote this straight from your heart, a lot of emotion is portrayed here. Keep writing, I really enjoy reading your work!

Lots of emotions... but well written one. You've written from your heart and it reflects. Good poem. Keep writing!

He took your love,
Away from me.
He needed an Angel,
So it seems.

^^^aww...these words are so very sad!
You did an excelent job on this, the poem is beautiful:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

Wow i really loved this poem because although you wrote it with an intention that has a specific meaning to you any one who reads it can relate in their own way. I loved this poem and due to circumstances i am facing at the moment found that i could really relate, your words were so powerful, u did an amazing job. keep it up 5/5, take care

I really liked this one.
Its really sad but very very good. The stanzas arent constant but i think that with the emotion of the poem it doesnt matter at all.

Another 5/5 from me!
Aish

Great poem!! I just lost my grandfather and your were words captured the emotions that I felt. The stanzas were inconsistent and a bit jumpy, but the feelings and emotions that were expressed through your words made up for it.

Thanks very much for the comment. I have many poems like this that seems like it's all over the place, but it makes sence. I liked it very much. I think you did a great job!