Morning Song

Congratulations

Amazing job! im speechless! :)

What a beautiful poem. Great imagery and word choices.
Excellent job!
Take careCindy

Oh yayy! You won the weekly contest, very good, it is a wonderful nature poem! i always wondered how to win one time...

^He chirps
at my window,
raw soul
and - the and is unnecessary.....
hard eyes are - the are is unnecessary.....
evident
as he blazes

in morning sun.
My bones
rustle
under skin
to
wake in
violent noise,
colored

in golden armor-

My feathers
are
now ruffled
(as are his),
for it is
far
too early.

Still,
I am grateful
to hear such
joy,
to be
honored
with his song. ^

Rather than do each line, I will tell you that they are line fragments and the structure of this piece is unsightly. You need to put it together as stanzas as opposed to broken up and fragmented sentences. I see what you were trying to depict in the piece and you could make it much better by editing the structure and removing unnecessary filler words. Try to make the most of each word. be a little more creative and descriptive.