Wow your poem paints a very deep picture, I like it.

Synthia

REALLY GOOD IT WAS VERY DEEP AND FILLED WITH EMOTION I TOOK IT AS TWO PEOPLE LOVING THEM BUT SOCIETY IS KEEPING THEM APART

Second stanza, third line, "together" is spelled wrong.

third stanza, third line, "pair" is spelled wrong.

Nice poem. Good imagery. I just don't understand how it relates to society. Maybe I'm a moron or something. In all honesty, this sorta sounded like it ought to be in the explicit section. But hey, I could be totally wrong and totally be missing the whole point of the poem.

Good write though! keep it up!

-mo-

This was awesome O.O it was very like WOW!!! Like it painted a VIVID picture in my head...and i love those kind of poems really =] so good job on this!! I felt like i was reading a book with this cool plot =]

CourtneyxHolland

Keep on writing!!!