Hmm...interesting work, I like it, deeply reflects the internal conflicts of pain. The form was also interesting, with the four seperate rhyming lines...overall, very nice poem!
Take care,
Ignoris

Your 4 line stanzas were a bit askew, making the flow awkward, but the overall pattern worked. Some spelling errors. BUT the story being told and language used were brilliant; “With your Spring hands and Winter insides, You are the greatest contradiction, It is unknown but I'm holding a disguise, Underneath is endless affliction.” I did really enjoy this poem 5/5 .

Ok somehow this poem riminds me of my mother...maybe you didn't write it for her, but the words and emotions in it made me think oh her. love the metaphors you used and the flow of the poem is simply amazing..brought a tear to my eye...beautiful sad poem..
keep it up!!
**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*