Hey no offence but your poem doesnt really mesh well. the concept is good though. i bet if you work on it a little it'd be great. 2/5

Your poem is okay. I mean, you'll get better as you write more. My poems kinda sounded like that too when I first started writing. But things will inspire you more as you go along and it'll all fit together smoothly. =]

Good job.
this is very sad tho.
im sorry something like this happened to you.
great peom tho.
5/5.
keep writing.
anp<3

Wow know that feeling it sucks
U may not be able to control ur heart but u can control ur mind
Always tell urself ull b ok n get by
Great poem