Nice work. The idea was good and I think that the world does need to do what you have stated to make it a better one to live in - not enough of it happens. There's probably just a couple of spelling/grammar things you could improve on but other than excellent :)

cheers josh

This poem is excactly how im still alive. If i live in the past, i would be dead. and If i lived in the future Id have no friends. i can defintly relate, Flowing, Stop Flowing lol good poem

Take every moment god gives you
And don't take it for granted
Because you could do one thing wrong
Then your whole life is ruined
^^ this is so freakin true! i mean everyone goes through life thinking i can do this later and God will forgive me i mean seriously people

With every breath you take
Someone else loses their life
So take each breath in consideration
It could be your husband or your wife
^^ now this was an eye opener i mean the whole husband and wife thing is just heartbreaking to think about good job writing this!

Live in the moment
Don't try to change the future
Don't worry about the past
Because it is the present moment that matters
No matter how slow or fast
^^ i try to tell so many ppl this! dont worry about things you cant change! learn from them and make better choices

Don't ever let go to early
Or try to hang on too long
Nothing will come of it
Good nor bad
^^ couldn't agree more dang you are good at this!
So always act like your happy
Instead of being so sad

Every litlle bit helps the world around you
So just help someone across the street or
Help someone pick up something they dropped
Do one good deed a day,
And you will be awarded
In many different ways
^^ random acts of kindness seriously they make peoples days
5/5 girly i nominated it for the contest! great job!

Thank you for writing this... its amazing. it reminds me that if i live in the past i cant get nothing done today. any i like it... keep writing.

For being so young you have a great way of looking at the world. This was a good poem and read quite well. One mistake I saw the word little is mispelled but all and all I gave it a five great work Plot121

It's really brilliant I think you are so mature!!!
you have a good outlook on life's matters so carry on and keep going.

Your poem is not unique and living for the moment is selfish and what you have written becomes a contradiction, as by doing something good you change something so living for the moment goes out the window. Conservitism is old fashioned and never truly works, as we need to move forward so er must look to the future and try to heal all wrongs your message is clear help people but your approach is not possible in the rel world, 4/5 for your efford but reread your poem and try to understand what I am saying.
Ray S

Bravo ^^

Well sum get ur message wen sum dnt. im like in the middle of not or do. i try to live for the moment times i dnt. depends on what happenin in life. but to pretend to be happy is sumthing many people can relate to. your poem is strong . i like it. keep up the good work!

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

There are few more positive messages that coul be delivered in aq poem and your delivery is excellent !

It never ceases to amaze me this site or its members as we have all age groups and the younger members are a constant joy to read most of the time, though I do find it sad also that member who in their profile say they are 14,15 or 16 can write poems that make me think at times they are in their 50s or 60s.
This is one such poem, its contents are very thought provoking and the poem itself flows and is well written. Though very pessimistic
I don't agree with all of its message especially the third stanza L2-3

Live in the moment
Don't try to change the future
Don't worry about the past

As I am sorry to say this is adapted in this day and age by to many self centred introverts and if we all adopt this attitude our world would be a terrible place, as we must learn from our past mistakes(war, terrorism, poverty etc) to make a better future for our children and ourselves by trying to stop them happening in our future. Yet you contradict those few lines at the end in your last stanza

Every litlle bit helps the world around you
So just help someone across the street or
Help someone pick up something they dropped
Do one good deed a day,
And you will be awarded
In many different ways

So obviously you don't come under the umbrella of being a self centred introvert.

This poem is dated 2008-09-12 that is a long time to have gone without contributing to the site, we must move on and not live on our past glories.
An excellent poem and like a lot of our members have said worthy of a 5/5 Ray S