This poem is one my of favorites!! i absolutely LOVE the moon!!5/5^^

This would read a lot better in stanza form instead of paragraph form, and it also needs punctuation. Here is what it should look with the right lines and punctuation:

"Oh moon how you float in the sky,
As your glow passes me by,
How you illuminate the night sky,
How you captivate my sight,
Readying for the coming fight.

As it approaches you fade away,
As you battle with the sun,
Your will come undone,
The sun comes soon,
So is the fate of the moon."

You repeated "sky" twice in the first stanza, which threw me off, and you also repeated some other words later on. I think the wording was okay but not the best. Just work on it a little, the imager was good but I think you could have gone into better detail.

4/5 from me, take care and God Bless!

~MaryAnne