I Blew It

by Amina   Sep 12, 2008


I'm the one that blew it
That ended the buring flame
I'm one that said it
So I'm the one to blame

I'm the one who said
"Let's just remain friends"
I'm one that caused
All the ackward trends

Between me and you
I'm one that did it all
The one who caused the zoo
And I'm one that one that made you feel blue

I'm one that blew it
That said the last goodbye
I'm sorry it ended that way
And that I had to lie

I'm the one at fault
That made a false assault
And made it a blury default

I blew it hard, and lost you so
And my feelings to bestow
I wish I could just go

I left you in the dark
With you still stuck to a spark

And I'm the one to blame
And it brings me great shame
To tell you I blew it
And made into some game
All for the fame

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  • 15 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Now this is better. It had some flow and rhythm to it.. in the first few stanzas.

    I was really like the repeat of "I'm the one" alot of people don't like te use of "I" or of repeating, but I think it was really making a statement about how upset you were at being the one to blow it.

    Anyway, you got away from the pattern after awhile. If you are going to go for a repeater, you need to stick with it. And again, your rhyme scheme was a bit faulty, but it was better.

    Try to clean it up a bit and it will be awesome!

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