Okay, I want to help you out on a couple of things. Don't put it in caps like I said before and use punctuation, otherwise its a run on sentence that is of no interest to the reader. Also, in this piece "u" should be "you". Your grammar is awful here, if English is not your number one language than I suggest you take time to look over your poetry before posting something that makes absolutely no sense to the reader. I don't mean to sound harsh, but I couldn't even read it, if you want others to look at it and want to grow as a poet, please take my advice, trust me, you will be better off. |