Hi :)
This piece is very impressive, and provoked a strong image in my mind. I like the short simplicity of it and the flow made it joyous to read :)
My favorite line:
'My eyes closed for fear of finding
What they'd meet'
I think this totaly sums up the emotions portrayed in this poem.
Great write,
Rob x

Wow this piece is just as good as the other one. i loved it! very powerful and deep. an interesting subject, and title. keep those poems coming, i love reading your work. job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.