Your work just keeps getting better and better. I really like this one. Much much better flow and rhyming scheme. :)

Well I'm sure if this poem were turn into a song, it would be a great song...maybe u should try to make the tune from the heart
I'm sure u'll get it right... and when you do do give me a buzz, coz i can so relate this poem to my life

keep it up

This poem is very good and I enjoyed reading it. It's sad yet beautiful ^^
The only 1 little thing is to make sure you capitalize all of your 'I's other than that wicked job

Love it. if this were a song i would have it on my fav's list. i absolutly love sad or love or hurt related songs. love the flow and you have an amazing gift so keep writing! KM

There is a rhythm to every heart, a beat to every true tune I think and your poem demonstrates the importance of timing
or harmonious relationships

well done