Comments : Dear heart

  • 11 years ago

    by Krista

    Really enjoyed it. nice job. keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen

    I liked the emotion you were trying to set in this poem.The way how you started it was kinda intriguing as if you were talking to your heart but then in the end it was your lover you were talking to. Hmm..thats it i guess, although as i said before i thyinkyour poem would even look better if its by stanzas but on the otherhand it wont make any difference as you have the proper punctuation marks in it..Good job..

  • 11 years ago

    by Ash

    Another well written poem from your side. A great depiction of something that remains amiss when our heart seems to be gone.

    I like the flow of this one and the fact that it was so simple though there are a few gramatical errors that i find. But other than that I think you did a wonderful job in depicted loneliness and yet a touch of pain at the same time. Well done.

    "filled this empty heart,"
    "filled my lonesome night,"

    ^^ I think you should use the word fill.

    "hope soon you were here,"
    Perhaps maybe change it to "hope soon you will be here".

  • 11 years ago

    by Paiger

    Alot of stuff thats already been done, the flow could have been better, but it was a pretty nice poem, keep up the good work :)

  • 11 years ago

    by purplemadness

    Absolutely fabulous, great choice of words. You know what? i am becoming a real fan of your poetry.
    Keep it up ;-)