I love this lines...

Perturbed eyes stare anxiously at the meadow before me.
Flowers loud in the gray grass; then I see him, waiting.
How I wish the rain would evaporate his clothing,
I believe then his skin would jump to me in thirst.

it seems made me so thirsty hehe,, well i love the definition of this story, its kinda has a great expressions that was very well express,, but i also notice the words like the above commentor ( to wqrds insterd towards) but over all its great. u've done a good job.. i love the message, very dedicated 5/5

"Rain beats down hard, enveloping my body with every drop,"
`Great word choice. Enveloping really stood out to me as a pretty strong word.

"My vision blurred, elongated raindrops suspend on my lashes."
`My vision IS blurred - I know I tend to leave words out, but you could always add is.

"Ruby lips turn plum as the icy air grazes over my porcelain face."
`Wow the imagery is so amazing in this piece. The word choice is fabulous. Ruby lips turn to plum... soo descriptive. :]

"Sliding feet fall out of my shoes as the puddles take control."
`Love it!

"Flowers loud in the gray grass; then I see him, waiting."
`Oh so beautiful. Well done. Great imagery!

"How I wish the rain would evaporate his clothing,
I believe then his skin would jump to me in thirst."
`Hehe. I love it. Such a great desire, huh? Cute cute. XD

"Each step towards each other erupts more yearning."
`So true! Loved the word choice, erupts was amazing!

"Then in the corner of my eye she appears, ravishing as always.
His hands left me, with one yearning stare he vanished."
`Woww. This really leave the reader sad. :[

Overall, this piece was fabulous. I could imagine it in my mind every word I read. Such great description. Amazing word choice. Outstanding imagery. Perfffect. 5/5. Well Done!

The imagery of this poem was so precise and meticulous.
i loved it.

this poem is so romantic. it's beautiful.

my favourite stanza:
"Rain beats down hard, enveloping my body with every drop,
My vision blurred, elongated raindrops suspend on my lashes.
Ruby lips turn plum as the icy air grazes over my porcelain face.
Sliding feet fall out of my shoes as the puddles take control."

The imagery of this poem was so precise and meticulous.
i loved it.

this poem is so romantic. it's beautiful.

my favourite stanza:
"Rain beats down hard, enveloping my body with every drop,
My vision blurred, elongated raindrops suspend on my lashes.
Ruby lips turn plum as the icy air grazes over my porcelain face.
Sliding feet fall out of my shoes as the puddles take control."

This was beautifully written. The flow, the concept, the word usage... all very good. I really enjoyed reading this... Although the lines were long, the flow never wavered and that's an accomplishment that I respect. 5/5

I like the picture . Alot of big words , it really describes both strong feelings and the scene perfectly . I have nothing bad to say , each line flowed beautifully into the other .. And everyone almost can relate to this . Amazing job , 5/5

I really liked this poem. I can relate to it. You used strong words in the right way. The format is great and the poems is just the right length. I give it a 5/5 because I see nothing wrong with it.

I agree with Zeenat. It was done very well, and from the title on it was interesting. You kept a constant vision throughout which, in my opinion, keeps the reader interested. The end was sad, but I liked it for sure. Again, not much to say, it was another good piece of work. Well done.

Wow. your detail is amazing. i can get a clear vision of what your saying. very well done. deff. a favorate<3