This is a very good one, with a very good inspiration behind it. Most people look for constant rhythm in a poem, and if it doesn't have that then they don't consider it good. I usually am the same and I try to put poems into rhythms if they don't have a specific one, and when you put this poem into rhythm it feels like the person is whispering it and is exaggerating certain parts, speaking faster and slower. Well just a very good job, i give it a 5!