If this is the poem you were reffering to, it's not bad, but strengthen the overall poem by using different combinations of words - play around with it a little more. make it more interesting, more powwwwerrrefullll;) and most of all, smile, I will keep reading them.

I like this one cause we all relate to this subject
its like why the games. to you its aboy to me its
my wife. Man why can't life just be simple. 5/5

Awh I really like it, it kind of reminds me of lyrics.

<3

Very well written

5/5 i can relate

I really liked it.