Beautiful poem.
your diction was flawless.
your poem had a very interesting and mezmerizing meaning to it. Life and us in it. some trying to hold on and not let go of it while others trying to find a way to live without guilt.

Lovely, was short but got straight to the point!
Nothing needs to be changed or fixed..
you're simply an amazing writer!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

I enjoyed reading this ^^ you kept me interested with every line.
A very well worded poem too, the flow was perfect =]

A Interesting theme......

Loved the title! It really caught my eye and had me wanting to read more. :]

The imagery you painted with your words were just flawless and I could imagine everything so clearly. You had a way of luring me into your world and searching for the hidden meanings behind your words and I loved that! It held depth and power which made it so much more interesting to read. The flow was just so natural without anything seeming forced or out of place. Your word choice was captivating as usual and made for a beautiful read.

"playing melodies that died on salty lips."
^This was so beautiful! Your play with words here painted a bittersweet imahe. Melodies always remind me of something soft and appealing but then you transitioned to death and salty which proved there was much more you meant besides what was on the surface. Well done! :]

I loved the repitition in the end because it just brought everything to a nice close and go your message across effectively. Another flawless piece from you my dear.

Well done! :]
*5/5*

Im speechless! amazing work! 5/5